Summer
And it grows, the vain
summer,
even for us with our
bright green sins:
behold the dry guest,
the wind,
as it stirs up quarrels
among magnolia boughs
and plays its serene
tune on
the prows of all the leaves—
and then is gone,
leaving the leaves
still there,
the tree still green, but breaking
the heart of the air.
In Carlo Betocchi's poem, Summer, he writes of the summer with a poetic purpose while the childlike simplicity contrasts greatly with the increasing shine of Betocchi’s diction. The way he compares the summer to the wind shows a true personal experience while also giving such a great amount of meticulous detail in the way "the wind stirs up quarrels among Mongolia boughs." Carlo uses the wind as an example of how summer vainly blows through and rustles and moves everything, then, just like that, it is gone, with everything just as it was. Just like the short months of summer it is there and just like that, gone, as if nothing had happened at all...
it's almost perfect except for the last sentence saying "he uses" but other than that i really liked it!
ReplyDeleteMake sure you don't use "he said" but besides that it was very well written and I enjoyed reading it!
ReplyDeleteI think if you went more in depth about the artifact and used more quotes, it would be really help it out. I enjoyed the use of some more challenging vocab words without over powering the reader with big word after big word :)
ReplyDeleteI like that you wrote the poem in the post. It was nice to see how you were referencing it.
ReplyDeleteit was really good, but be care not to say "he said" "he uses" and "he writes"
ReplyDeleteThanks for posting the poem also! Its nice to know what you're referencing. I think you have good ideas, but could expand a little more on them. Also, avoid "he writes" and "he uses."
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